This is Not a Story Ad

This is an advertisement for my book. This is part of the first chapter. I think it's really good. Please make comments in the bottom. Hard criticism, hard, please!!! lol

This is Not a Story Chapter 1

            One horrible stormy afternoon Lilaque was sitting in a chair looking on eBay. She was trying to find something to free her boredom. She was sure she was never going to find anything interesting. Her boredom was so fierce she thought she would burst. Finally she saw something that caught her eye. It was a book called a most peculiar name.

            “This is Not a Story?” she read. “Maybe there is a description…nope, no description…there is the number to call if you want to buy it. Maybe I do want to buy it…no. I don’t think so. Maybe…no. Maybe…OK, yes.”

            She found herself dialing the number that was on the bottom of the picture.

            Finally the day arrived that she was getting the book; and then came a knock.

            Yes! She thought. “Hello, welcome,” she said.

            “Hello to you too. Here’s your book. We couldn’t keep it anymore. Thank you so much for buying it. We really have to get to a concert really soon, sorry, but we really have to leave.”

            “Bye!” the people said.

            “Bye!” Lilaque yelled as the people got into the car. 

That's it. Remember, HARD criticism! 

-Dreamer